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-Jeremy- by ~bloodguard:iconbloodguard:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional


I gaze upon his body
Soft and innocent
Broken and shattered
Enshrouded in sterilized sheets
Resting upon a dead
Steel
Table
A million and one needles
Pumping gallons of phlegm
Killing him
And keeping him alive
As I grasp his limp hand
And gently stroke it
Thick bloody tears
Wrenched from the sacred
And most hallowed depths
Of my heart
Forged and tempered
In the deepest pits
Of sorrow and despair
Coarse down my cheeks
And gently splash on the sheets
Staining them with crimson emotion
As memories of time spent together
Joyous thoughts and occasion
Moments of intimate closeness
Race through my mind
And intensify my despair
As the shadowy hand of anguish
Tightens its grip around my heart
Squeezing even more vitae
From my sapped spirit
Streams of tears
Rain down upon his countenance
As my quivering lips
Scrape tenderly against his
As I kiss him
Goodbye
One last time
©2003-2009 ~bloodguard
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Author's Comments

Well I have a friend, 13 years old, gay. His boyfriend got hit by a bus last year... lingered three days and died... sad

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~mk3110 Mar 10, 2003, 9:24:49 PM
Aw, this really hits home for me in some ways. Just the fact that it's a dying person in a hospital. Anyway, I loved the poem, really touching, and well-written. I love the descriptions (yet hate them at the same time--so sad!)
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~alcatote Mar 10, 2003, 9:39:44 PM
One of the saddest things I've ever read :( (Sad) Beautiful poem...
Not much else to say.
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~aprigel Mar 10, 2003, 9:40:25 PM
Hug
That's so painfully beautiful. I love the way you express yourself.


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~aenim-a Mar 10, 2003, 11:06:26 PM
that rigth there


is your best work...


i swear to .... well yea

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~riceandprozac Mar 11, 2003, 5:35:06 AM
amazing. just simply.... yea. there's nothing i can say here that hasn't been said already. wonderful.


when i first read the title in my messages, i thought you meant jeremy as in my ex boyfriend, who i know you are somewhat friendly with here on DA.

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~affirmation Mar 11, 2003, 10:17:51 AM
Crimson emotion.. is cool. Good work.

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~sagi Mar 11, 2003, 3:17:30 PM
So sad... Hug I'm sorry for his loss, it must be hard to lose a loved one... Really nice poem, lots of feeling. Heart
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~backwords Mar 11, 2003, 3:44:22 PM
gah...stop writing so good.
ill never be able to write like you...
but at least i can pretend =) (Smile)
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*keofoxglove Mar 23, 2003, 10:45:12 PM
*whimper* reminds me of debish and tank. damn bloody tears...i'll never get those stains out. damn brain...i'll never get the bloody thoughts out. that's pretty depressing, but whatever inspires you *shrugs* yur poems really touch me

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Keo Foxglove lost her head
she fell in a grave
and now she's dead
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